改写:持枪歹徒落入法网-Guman Flees to Ningbo, Walks into Police Web(网)

持枪歹徒落入法网
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下面是一篇记叙文，叙述了一个持枪歹徒抢劫上海一家银行、杀死一人逃往宁波，后被警察捕获的事。请你在阅读后把它改写成新闻报道。
Guman Flees to Ningbo, Walks into Police Web (网)
Zhu Yadi, a woman cashier (出纳员) of Dalian Road Branch Bank, was on duty during the lunch break (午休时间), November 16,1987. Just after she finished receiving a deposit (一笔存款) from the neighbouring bookstore, a gunman (持枪歹徒) shot at her with a pistol. At that moment, the woman clerk of the bookstore, who had just handed over the money to the cashier, was just stepping out of the bank door when she heard the sound of the explosion. Turning back, she came face to face with a young man dashing out (冲出) from the bank's side-door carrying a glistening pistol (闪亮的手枪).
The woman clerk immediately telephoned the incident (事件) to the police station. Police arrived within minutes of the alarm, and the victim (受害者), who was lying on the ground in a pool of blood, was rushed to a nearby hospital where she died from a bullet wound (枪伤)that cut deep into her head from the face.
The police tracked (追踪) the gunman down to the coastal city, Ningbo, where he sought refuge (寻找藏身处) under the roof of his fiancee's (未婚妻的) aunt. At a department store, the man still carrying two pistols, and some ammunition (弹药) when two police officers came upon him and handcuffed (戴上手铐) after a seven-day breathless manhunt (追捕) . The man turned out to be a 24-year-old apprentice conductor (学徒售票员) Yu Shuangge on city bus No. 75 in Shanghai.
（取材于《上海学生英文报》1987年12月8日第一版）
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Gunman Flees to Ningbo, Walks into Police Web
Police arrested 24-year-old Yu Shuangge in Ningbo on November 23, exactly a week after he staged an armed bank robbery in Shanghai killing a woman cashier.
Yu was tracked down by police at a department store in the coastal city where he sought refuge under the roof of his fiancee's aunt. He was still carrying two pistols and some ammunition when two police officers came upon him and handcuffed him after a seven-day breathless manhunt.
On November 13, three days before the bank robbery, he stole
three pistols and 268 bullets. Since last August he has been an apprentice conductor on city Bus No. 75.
Now armed, he made a daring attempt to rob a Dalian Road Branch Bank, next to the Shanghai Foreign Language Education Bookstore just outside the campus of the Shanghai International Studies University. He chose the bank probably because only a few clerks, including 32-year-old Zhu Yadi, a widow with a two-year-old baby boy, wounded there.
He spent nearly the whole morning at the bank, according to eyewitness' accounts, most likely waiting for the lunch break when there would be only one person on duty.
A few minutes past noon, a woman clerk of the neighbouring bookstore was just stepping out of the door when she heard the sound of an explosion. Turning back, she came face to face with a young man dashing out from the bank's side-door carrying a glistening pistol.
Police arrived within minutes of the alarm, and the victim, who was lying on the ground in a pool of blood, was rushed to a nearby hospital where she died from a bullet wound that cut deep into her head from the face.
【写法指要】
1）新闻报道文章的题目多以词组或短语的形式出现。如果以句子的形式出现时，动词一般要用现在时态，如本文的“…flees to…”，“walks into…”即是。
2）如前所说，记叙性文章突出文章的结尾，而新闻文章恰恰相反，将最重要的情节放在最前面。本文的结构与原文就正好相反，将新闻的6大要素，即人物、时间、地点、事件、原因、结果大都放在文章一开头的导语中了。

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